Kia ora Aroha. My name is Jorjah. I am a year 6 at paihia school.I like the way you added examples of what you were learning. You brought me back to when I was learning about adjectives and commas, I still have to work on them. I really like that you have taken in normal everyday words and turned them into more interesting words. Did you know when you take a breath that is where the commas go ? In your writing I picked up a tiny mistake instead of, the old book smell yuck you could do, the old book smells yuck. There was also she bit into the shiny red apple, but taste yuck. Maybe instead you could do she bit into the shiny red apple,but it tasted yuck. I hope that I have helped you if you have time can you please check out my blog at http://psjorjaha.blogspot.com ?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Aroha. My name is Jorjah. I am a year 6 at paihia school.I like the way you added examples of what you were learning. You brought me back to when I was learning about adjectives and commas, I still have to work on them. I really like that you have taken in normal everyday words and turned them into more interesting words. Did you know when you take a breath that is where the commas go ? In your writing I picked up a tiny mistake instead of, the old book smell yuck you could do, the old book smells yuck. There was also she bit into the shiny red apple, but taste yuck. Maybe instead you could do she bit into the shiny red apple,but it tasted yuck. I hope that I have helped you if you have time can you please check out my blog at http://psjorjaha.blogspot.com ?